Site's language: 
| correctmytext facebookconnect | Log in | Sign up
correctmytext
Text's language:
TEXTS | TAGS | USERS 

Started to learn a foreign language, but need to verify your texts by native speakers?
You can enter your text at CorrectMyText.com and native speakers will correct your grammar and provide a spoken version!
Help other users to check their texts in your native language or language that you know!

Learning English

Homework. Please correct the mistakes and the grammar and also the style. |

Author:jan808
Copyright:Can use
Corrector's skills: Native, Perfect
Tags: The Curse Clarke Atomic bomb
Language: English
Progress: processing: 0, ready corrections: 1, remains corrections: 0

Situation and development
The text "The Curse" written by A.C.Clarke describes the sight of a little town after the explosion of an atomic bomb.
First the reader gets to know that in the past the town has not been influenced by the happening in the rest of the world. The different wars have not touched this little town.
Next the author describes how the town have been destroyed by a bomb and what the town looks like now. During the whole text there are some parts, which describe the nightmarish devastation of this place. Because of the discription the reader has to think about an atomic bomb, but it is not mentioned by name.
After the explosion a river has bursted its banks. A church near the river has been destroyed by the explosion, but the gravestones are still there and some epitaphs are still readable. But now the river slowly submerges the graveyard, until it overflows the graveyard completely. It becomes clear now that an atomic bomb must have caused this destruction, because the author uses the word "radioactivity" (l.28).
In the end a poem underlines the sacrality of gravestones and the author reveals that the gravestones will remain under water forever.

Structure and style
The first paragraph is about the situation in the town before the explosion(l.1-5). After that the author describes how the explosion has happened (l.5-13) and then the high water of the river(l.14-18). The next paragraph is about the church and the graveyard. During the next two paragraphs the river submerges the land and overflows the gravestones(l.25-39). In the end there is a poem to underline the holiness of graves and a last sentence which reveals that the gravestones will remain under water forever(l.40-end). During the whole text the author describes the ruined town, what it looks like now and compares it to the situation before to underline the horrible devastation.
The whole structure should emphasize the cruelty and inhumanity of an atomic bomb. The horrible devastation is the central point of the story. The narrative time is the past tense, but the author uses a lot of past perfect to describe the background of this nightmarish picture. Additionally, in the beginning the holy gravestones seem to be the only thing which comes through the explosion. But in the order of events they also disappear.

All stylistic devices have only one aim: to underline how horrible an atomic bomb is. Firstly the author emphasizes the incredible power of the explosion with terms like "colossal hammer-blow"(l.15) and secondly he underlines the horrible effect of the explosion for instance with the sentence "In a moment of time the toil an treasure of centuries had been swept away". This example also shows that the author uses a lot of pictures and metaphors. The central point in this story is the description of the ruined town and because of this metaphorical language the description is very vivid. Additionally the author repeats during the whole text how horrible the effects are.
The author uses a lot of past perfect. Because of that the whole text seems to be "far away" and conveys an unemotional and insensitive impression. This goes well which the unhappy picture which is described.
The poem shows the sacrality of gravestones and so underlines the awful effects of an atomic bomb, because the explosion causes the overflow of the gravestones.
correction by Simon








This text is already corrected!


Hello! My name is Dmitry Lopatin. I've created correctmytext.com
in 2009 to help everyone who learns foreign languages.
I'll be happy to see you as my friends in Facebook:



 

Learning to write and speak a foreign language correctly requires having somebody to correct your grammar and usage errors. Otherwise you may learn a substandard version of the language with deep-rooter mistakes and incorrect usages that are hard to get rid of.

A popular and tried-and-true way to learn languages involves writing texts in a foreign language on a daily basis and reading them aloud to a native speaker, who will correct any mistakes.

Native speakers or language professionals will review your text and correct all errors of style or grammar free of charge. You can also request a sound recording of the spoken version of your corrected text that will let you hear the subtleties of pronunciation by a native speaker.

 


Text's language: Русский English Français Deutsch 中文 日本語 Español 한국어 Português Italiano Polski Nederlands Suomi Català Українська Magyar Türkçe Česky Română Volapük Esperanto Dansk Slovenčina Bahasa Indonesia العربية Tiếng Việt עברית Lietuvių Српски / Srpski Slovenščina Български Eesti فارسی Hrvatski नेपाल भाषा Kreyòl ayisyen Galego Norsk (nynorsk)‬ ไทย Bahasa Melayu Ελληνικά తెలుగు Euskara Cebuano हिन्दी Македонски ქართული Latina Brezhoneg Bosanski Lëtzebuergesch Íslenska Azərbaycan Shqip मराठी Cymraeg ইমার ঠার/বিষ্ণুপ্রিয়া মণিপুরী Latviešu Tagalog Piemontèis Basa Jawa বাংলা Occitan தமிழ் Ido Беларуская Aragonés Sicilianu Plattdüütsch Basa Sunda Kiswahili Nnapulitano Kurdî / كوردی Frysk Afrikaans Asturianu 粵語 Žemaitėška Walon اردو Winaray മലയാളം Runa Simi Ripoarisch Чӑвашла Norsk (bokmål) Srpskohrvatski / Српскохрватски Беларуская (тарашкевіца) Тоҷикӣ Gaeilge Vèneto ગુજરાતી Tarandíne Gàidhlig O'zbek Kapampangan ಕನ್ನಡ ייִדיש Māori Lumbaart Yorùbá Bân-lâm-gú Nāhuatl گیلکی Corsu Hornjoserbsce Қазақша Armãneashce Alemannisch Limburgs Interlingua Հայերեն Саха тыла Bikol Central 贛語 Tatarça/Татарча Türkmençe संस्कृत Nedersaksisch Иронау 吴语 Føroyskt West-Vlams Võro مصرى Nouormand አማርኛ Pangasinan Rumantsch Basa Banyumasan Монгол ދިވެހިބަސް Gaelg Sámegiella Zazaki Furlan नेपाली Scots Boarisch Líguru Novial भोजपुरी Malti Ilokano مَزِروني पािऴ 文言 Kaszëbsczi Uyghurche‎ / ئۇيغۇرچە ភាសាខ្មែរ پنجابی Arpetan Ladino සිංහල Kernewek Anglo-Saxon Sardu Hawai`i Deitsch Malagasy lea faka-Tonga Коми Ślůnski ਪੰਜਾਬੀ پښتو Эрзянь Interlingue Fiji Hindi Avañe'ẽ Lingála Seeltersk Svenska

About this site | Press | Support service: